What was challenging?
There is extensive research already conducted on break times in schools. There are two schools of thought regarding the curtailment of student’s recess time. One is in favor of curtailment and the other is against the curtailment of the school recess. Both schools of thought have strong researches conducted in favor of their arguments. It was challenging to build up my own argument/perception siding with one school of thought. At the end of my extensive brainstorming, I decided to write against the curtailment of recess time.
What went well?
Once I formulated the premise of my research, I wrote the topic sentence against the curtailment of recess. Then, it was easy to formulate my paper favoring my topic sentence. The extensive research conducted on my chosen topic made it easier for me to write my paper.
What did you try to do as you revised your rough drafts?
First of all, I proofread my draft to remove my grammatical mistakes. Then I organized my draft into proper order and paragraph sections. Then I inculcated the topic sentence in my writing to give it final writing.
What are the paper’s strength?
The prominent strength of my paper is the incorporation of other researches supporting my point of view favoring the importance of recess time. I incorporated in-text citations of other researchers’ arguments against the curtailment of recess time.
What are the paper’s weakness?
The major weakness of my paper is the short length of my research. I believe that it should have been a bit more in terms of length. More research in the paper favoring my argument against the curtailment of recess could have made it stronger.
What do you want to work on in your next essay?
In the next essay, I want to choose a sociology theory and apply it on the private schools and public schools. I want to research on the sociological perspectives regarding the schools; public and private.
